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Hope yall enjoy...
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interesting...
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Story seems implausible.
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Slurth wrote:
Story seems implausible.
Doesn't most?
I thought it was pretty good.
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it seem pretty good
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Kirito wrote:
i some wat a good write but my grammer is terrible and i dont mind reading ur and help improve my writing
PandaPsych0013 wrote:
Hope yall enjoy...
Well, it was better than expected...problem with short stories is....THEY'RE SHORT D: Maybe write something longer if your attention span can deal with it.
Also, if Karley Sun is your name, awesome! Great name <object class="emojione" data="https://resources.enjin.com/1489581540/themes/core/images/emojione/svg/1f600.svg?0" type="image/svg+xml" standby=":d">:d</object>
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Oh, crap, I forgot to take that off of there... oh well, too late now :/ and thanks guys.
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I thought it was really good, it ends on a nice cliff hanger and has very good depth in the two characters in a short period, and there is room to develop and draw out the plot to create suspense within the stories' framework. Maybe you could introduce a supporting character such as the person on the phone with Kathy to draw out more information and turn it into a larger piece. That is if you want to construct more on to this plot. If not then it is a very good short story nonetheless. 